Back to the drawing board

I wrote my first draft of Identity 01 rather fast, and I'd put it away to give it some time to breathe, if you will, but my thoughts over the time since then have been increasingly unhappy with the chapter. All-in-all, it's still...unfocused. I'd written it mostly from Ranma's perspective, but writing it with him as the POV character had significant problems. Overall, I feel it forced the chapter to be too slow, as he had to come to realize certain things as a result of what happened, as opposed to a faster, more natural approach--where he reacted from the wedding from the outset.

I'm trying again. The current idea is first-person, from Akane's POV, perhaps for the whole trilogy. We'll see.